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Revision as of 16:55, 15 July 2024


Limit Jargon

The excessive use of jargon makes it difficult for the public to receive the Department's messages. Planning touches many disciplines, including architecture, engineering, environmental science, data analysis, and geography. If you were to combine the specialized terms each field uses, a tremendous amount of jargon (in addition to planning-specific jargon) may be unknown or confusing to the public.

Not All Jargon is Bad. Not all jargon should be eliminated for public documents. Sometimes it is necessary to describe a complex concept efficiently. As language evolves, jargon can become common because it conveys a specific meaning better than others (such as "gentrification").

We place accessibility barriers for the public when unnecessary jargon is embedded with a bureaucratic writing style. While bureaucratic and academic writing certainly have their place, a well-written plain language document is understandable to scholarly researchers, planning professionals, and County residents alike.

Tips:

Eliminate Garbage Language

We are all guilty of using garbage language. Professionals are taught to use words and phrases that sound effective and authoritative. But most garbage language is filled with words and phrases that are overly complicated, such as:

  1. iterative
  2. catalyze
  3. engender
  4. incubate
  5. implementation framework
  6. transformative
  7. focal point
  8. synthesize
  9. synergy

Garbage language also includes words or phrases that are so overused as to render them meaningless, which can lead to miscommunication. Consider the sentiment of planner Daniel Herriges, who notes that garbage language can hide areas of disagreement on an issue:

The ubiquitous word livable ... is a good candidate for the garbage heap. People like it because it's vague and meaningless, and it allows you to pretend to agree with all sorts of people you don't actually agree with. A search for "livable city" very quickly turns up references to Copenhagen and its world-famous compact neighborhoods and bicycle-friendly streets, which would surely prompt eyerolls among the members of Livable California, a group formed to oppose measures that would allow increased residential density in that state. One suspects the Livable California crowd would also fail to see eye-to-eye with folks at AARP's Livable Communities initiative, who have championed such senior-friendly housing innovations as backyard accessory dwellings. The point of using livable is to stake a claim to moral authority, not to convince anyone or communicate anything. Source: Daniel Herriges, "Does 'Garbage Language' Infect How We Talk About Cities?" Creative Commons License CC BY SA 3.0 DEED

See plain language alternatives in the plain language thesaurus.

Remove Unnecessary Language

Every word you write should earn its place. If you can cut a word, do it. This list of unnecessary words an excellent place to start eliminating wordiness.

To test whether a word or phrase is needed, strike it and see whether the sentence maintains its meaning and is still clear. Not all of the words on the unnecessary words list need to go; whether a word is necessary depends on context. If a word serves a purpose, keep it.

Here are additional tips:

Examine specific words vs. phrases

  • Don't use a phrase if a single word works.
  • Avoid redundant words.
advance warning warning
a period of three weeks three weeks
specific example example
in the vicinity of near
the month of March March

Remove Intrusive Words

Intrusive words contribute nothing to the sentence's meaning.

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The species is endangered by fluctuating temperature conditions. The species is endangered by fluctuating temperatures.
The new development review policy simplifies permit request activities. The new development review policy simplifies permit requests.

Avoid redundant phrases

The species is endangered by fluctuating temperature conditions. The species is endangered by fluctuating temperatures.
The new development review policy simplifies permit request activities. The new development review policy simplifies permit requests.

Avoid Redundant Terms

The data must be assessed and evaluated. The data must be assessed/The data must be evaluated.
The organization detailed its future plans for preserving the historic buildings. The organization detailed its plans for preserving the historic buildings.


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